Second Storyboard

I'm not sure if it would be a good idea to have each advert start where the person has 'bad breath' and mint refreshed their breath? Because if I do this, then surely it would appear as if the mint is only for people who has bad breath? Need opinions please!!

If it is a possibility to do this, then the second storyboard could go something like this:
-Couple sitting on a bench in the park. They are fooling around
-Man leans in to the girl for a kiss but she rejects him after she smells his breath
-Feeling upset, he tries to sort out his breath
-He trys refreshing his mouth by spraying mouth freshner in it, however this does not do the job
-Next, he puts lots of chewing gum in his mouth but his jaw aches and his breath isn't fresh
-Angry, he sits down with no hope, but then spots the mint
-He tries the mint and has a sence of relief by the freshness in his mouth
-A shot of the man walking through town with a new sense of confidence and all the girls looking at him OR him back on the bench kissing his girlfriend/she can't get her hands of him

Its a bit of the same principle as the previous advert, just with a different story.

Heres the storyboard that I drew up for this advert:

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We think that this storyboard will appeal to our target audience moreso than the other storyboars that we have, making this storyboard one of our strongest ones. We also feel that we can add humour through this type of plot which is what we are aiming for. I think that this storyboard could potentially have more shots included therefore I am going to make a re-draft of this storyboard and add in more shots. I also think that this plot is achievable, and I really like the use of the end screen because it again brings up our product meaning that the focus is on the mints. (and also a lot of mint adverts have some sort of end screen with the mint being the main focus!)